The bank that lends string instruments instead of money to musicians. MIB (Musical Instrument Bank) survives on donations and loans. MIB gives every year instruments away for three years threw a competition, giving young people a chance and a lifetime experience. Those instruments that MIB holds are worth millions of dollars from an investing point of view!
Louise De Tremerie
http://www.ncoa.am/Music/Musical%20Instrument%20Bank.htm
1 opmerking:
Original point of view and clear message, but too many errors at this level.
S1: no verb in the main sentence; could function as a subtitle but not as a topc sentence
S2: short simple sentence: ok if it follows longer and complicated sentences, but here it follows an already incomplete sentence
S3: to give awa is not the same as to lend
S3: through a competition
S3: Dutch positioning of sentence elements - better:
Every year, MIB lends/loans...
S3: once-in-a-lifetime experience; a lifetime experience is an experience that lasts a full life
S4: the instruments that MIB holds are worth... OR these instruments are worth...
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